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The stranger's avatar

Just wooow💙

This flows in a way i was flowing in the verses

Like a waterfall, i was Falling👌🏾

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Okay first… this made me cringe a little 😅 I am NOT a water person. When I was little, my stepdad would take us across Puget Sound in a little motor boat, and I was convinced sharks were just… waiting. I didn’t know there weren’t sharks there, so I would literally sing to them so they’d be happy and not eat me 😂 So yeah, this definitely hit that old fear in me. But I really love where you took it at the end. That shift into surrender, into becoming part of it instead of fighting it… Like letting go without losing yourself. Well done, loved it.

Becky Hayward's avatar

Omg! Singing to sharks! I love that. And aww thanks so much!! ❤️❤️🙏🙏

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

LOL... well, it worked, I never got eaten!

Becky Hayward's avatar

Indeed it did!!! 🤣🤣 🎶🎼🎤

PancakeSushi's avatar

Shades of Rime of the Ancient Mariner. Don't trust that salty water whispering

Becky Hayward's avatar

water water everywhere and not a drop to drink was exactly what I was thinking of!!

PancakeSushi's avatar

You did well Becky, great poem. I love Rime, and you did it Sublime homage

Becky Hayward's avatar

Coming from you that means so much!!

Original Worlds (Ira Robinson)'s avatar

I remember these! ;)

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Wow Becky!

Working now and can’t to come back to this later with a better comment!

Love that the image inspired you for such a great poem!

Becky Hayward's avatar

yay! Loved the image prompt! Have a great day at work!