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Gary L Taylor's avatar

I really liked that. You can feelnthe tension and the emotion, you build it superbly well, throughout.

Mike Underell's avatar

Single-handedly you've got me reading fiction again! As many people have mentioned already, you are able to create emotional tension so incredibly well. You're a really gifted writer 🙂 Even if I can't read your pieces immediately, I keep them unread so I can get to them in the future (like right now!). Keep going, Becky 🙌

Becky Hayward's avatar

Ahh!! tears in my eyes with your words! I’m hoping you’re able to take some time from all the work you’re doing. You’re literally everywhere! I see it!! lol. Doing such good out there, but don’t forget you. So take your time and there’s never any obligation to read my silly stuff. lol. But I do love that you enjoy it! I’ve got the next installment in the works for this one!! 🙌🏻 More tension underway!

Mike Underell's avatar

Your stuff is not silly whatsoever 🙂 Can’t wait for the next one!

Apoorvaa S Raghavan's avatar

Oh…wow

Becky Hayward's avatar

Thank you!! Love that response!! ❤️❤️

Cory's avatar

Wow, this gripped me, Becky! What a great read! 😊

Becky Hayward's avatar

Cory!! Thank you so much for reading! So glad it hooked you (maybe w a pinky lol)!!

Cory's avatar

A pinky?!?! 😂

Thank you for writing. ❤️ I loved it!

Tim Chessher's avatar

Nice story! It's a cohesive scene, and you def captured how the characters seem to feel. Thanks for sharing this!

Fiona Bridges's avatar

I am going to read it again tomorrow night! I accidentally deleted the video!

Nicole's avatar

A meeting to check if the disappointment was the correct way to sum up a relationship. I approve of the conclusion, Becky! Isn't it funny, it's always the same.

Tombarriesimmons's avatar

Reading this, I felt a tingle of electricity. What more can I say?

Becky Hayward's avatar

Oh thank you so much for reading and omg! If you felt the electricity, I am so so glad!!

Crosswind Chronicles's avatar

From “we died” to “this is the line” fifteen years later?

That’s not a meet-cute. That’s a holding pattern over unfinished business.

The pinky in the first story was sweet.

The pinky in this one is dangerous.

And “For now.”

Yeah… that’s not a drink order. That’s a delayed departure.

You absolutely knew what you were doing here.

Bravo Becky Bravo!!! 👏🏻

Becky Hayward's avatar

Thank you soooo much!! 🙏🙏

AsukaHotaru's avatar

The hand on her bare knee, just placed there and not moving, made me actually stop breathing for a second.. like, "excuseeee meeeee." I'm melting here...!

Becky Hayward's avatar

Oooh boy! Love it!!

HVR's avatar

"The weight of fifteen years presses between them. There’s no anger or accusation anymore. Just facts. Just history."

Great line.

Also, we need Before Midnight next.

Becky Hayward's avatar

Thank you so much!!

I’ll work on that!!

Sam’s Spaghetti's avatar

So good I had chills!

Beau Watson's avatar

I've told you elsewhere but you do emotional tension very well :)

Mike Underell's avatar

I very much agree with this assessment!

Becky Hayward's avatar

Oh my goodness!! Thanks so much @Mike Underell !! truly!!

Becky Hayward's avatar

So kind!!!😭😭And seriously your opinion means so much to me! ❤️

Monica A Leyva's avatar

Oh Becky, this one has me in the feels for so many reasons.

Becky Hayward's avatar

Oh I’m so glad you felt this with me. Thank you so much for reading this!

Dave Boyko's avatar

Oh man, the reunion pinky touch... been there... missed the movie we planned on watching... giggled like teens in the car...

Thank you for sparking that memory in me!

Becky Hayward's avatar

And thank you soooo much for reading!!

Becky Hayward's avatar

Oh yay!! So glad it brought you back!!

Mathew C. Bryant's avatar

Becky 😳

The tension in this was phenomenal!👏 🕯️

Becky Hayward's avatar

Thank you!!! Those pinkies amirite?? lol